Sunday, December 9, 2007
Desk Crit for Courtnie Wolfgang
Hey Courtnie,
I am ashamed to be doing this (somewhat, considering last night's
conversation on untimeliness with crits) but also think this could be useful
for you in the future. Besides I DID talk to you at the rehearsal but just
didn't write anything down....
Anyway, I was just looking at your project and I really enjoyed the way
you've gently guided the user through art critique and interpretation. Well
done! My comments are just to help you strengthen your wayfinding/navigation
technique.
It's a little difficult to remember which section I'm viewing, especially
when I'm ready to choose the next one. I know you have different quotes for
each of the 6 sections, but I think it would help if you were to make the
menu item bold and maybe include the menu title again, small and subtly
above your more fancy, scripted title in the upper right. For instance, the
page marked "experience" is lost to the title "interpretations of Magritte"
because you have another section called interpret -- with a few more cues,
this would be clearer.
I also kept forgetting what I was supposed to be doing between pages (not
your fault, I'm already addled) but I think if you moved the quote you have
per section and brief directions into the space to the right of the picture,
this could better direct and organize the actions of your viewers. Not to
fill up the white space, but to help further focus the section purpose and
user directions. If you did this and made the directions a san-serif, they
would stand out and separate from the fancy, curly title and quote.
An example: all this summed up for the "context" page:
- Title right of picture: "Context" small, somehow integrated with "History
and Philosophy"
- Display/content space right of picture: Quote "Interpreters place artworks
into philosophical and artistic contexts" followed by smaller text "(roll
over image to explore)"
- Menu at bottom: highlight or bold menu item "context"
I am ashamed to be doing this (somewhat, considering last night's
conversation on untimeliness with crits) but also think this could be useful
for you in the future. Besides I DID talk to you at the rehearsal but just
didn't write anything down....
Anyway, I was just looking at your project and I really enjoyed the way
you've gently guided the user through art critique and interpretation. Well
done! My comments are just to help you strengthen your wayfinding/navigation
technique.
It's a little difficult to remember which section I'm viewing, especially
when I'm ready to choose the next one. I know you have different quotes for
each of the 6 sections, but I think it would help if you were to make the
menu item bold and maybe include the menu title again, small and subtly
above your more fancy, scripted title in the upper right. For instance, the
page marked "experience" is lost to the title "interpretations of Magritte"
because you have another section called interpret -- with a few more cues,
this would be clearer.
I also kept forgetting what I was supposed to be doing between pages (not
your fault, I'm already addled) but I think if you moved the quote you have
per section and brief directions into the space to the right of the picture,
this could better direct and organize the actions of your viewers. Not to
fill up the white space, but to help further focus the section purpose and
user directions. If you did this and made the directions a san-serif, they
would stand out and separate from the fancy, curly title and quote.
An example: all this summed up for the "context" page:
- Title right of picture: "Context" small, somehow integrated with "History
and Philosophy"
- Display/content space right of picture: Quote "Interpreters place artworks
into philosophical and artistic contexts" followed by smaller text "(roll
over image to explore)"
- Menu at bottom: highlight or bold menu item "context"
Desk Crit for Suhwa Lee
Hi Suwha,
I just took a look at your project "Explore Constellations!" I like the colors you've chosen for the types section, it is fun to look at and has a great contrast. The visuals you've used for each constellation add a nice touch -- from the stars forming the pattern to the drawing being laid on top. I might actually remember this information now!
I have a few comments for you. Some of these are very minor details, but things you should consider when you are designing interactions.
Buttons - It can be hard to rollover these buttons sometimes. Make the target area bigger for rollover (not just the words, I'll show you).
For the section "Types"
* The text can be hard to see with the constellation in the background. Maybe make the stars lighter in the back or find a way to incorporate the constellation with your text.
* I wasn't sure what the red arrow button would do at first (if I'd learn more about the constellation or go to the next one). If you added page numbers for each screen per constellation, this may help. Think about saying "1 of 4 pages" to indicate where the user is.
* the red arrows sometimes move between pages – Cassiopeia, Andromeda, Draco, Libra, Sag, Leo, Perseus, Orion
* Hercules moves from the first to second pages
A few typos on these pages:
Ursa Minor: p4 - line 7 - "horizon",
Cassiopeia: p5 - line 7 - "beautiful"
Andromeda: p4 - line 6 - "consulting an oracle, Cepheus"
Draco: p5 - line 2 - "Thuban", p6 - line 1 - "Greek myth"
Sagittarius: p3 - line 10 - "Milky Way", p7 - line 5 - "although he had not"
Leo: p3 - line 4 "Big Dipper",
Hydra: p3 - line 1 - "Sea Monster, is seen", p4 - line 4 "magnitude of about 2"
Also, a few pages had different spacing between sentences.
Patterns, Game:
Nothing loaded in content area.
Gallery:
Cool idea! Maybe add titles to the image, so the viewer remembers which constellation they are looking at. Draco is hard to see.
Sitemap, Reference:
Page does not exist
Great subject, by the way, I think everyone must enjoy looking at stars. :) I look forward to seeing what else you're planning for this.
See you later today,
Emily
I just took a look at your project "Explore Constellations!" I like the colors you've chosen for the types section, it is fun to look at and has a great contrast. The visuals you've used for each constellation add a nice touch -- from the stars forming the pattern to the drawing being laid on top. I might actually remember this information now!
I have a few comments for you. Some of these are very minor details, but things you should consider when you are designing interactions.
Buttons - It can be hard to rollover these buttons sometimes. Make the target area bigger for rollover (not just the words, I'll show you).
For the section "Types"
* The text can be hard to see with the constellation in the background. Maybe make the stars lighter in the back or find a way to incorporate the constellation with your text.
* I wasn't sure what the red arrow button would do at first (if I'd learn more about the constellation or go to the next one). If you added page numbers for each screen per constellation, this may help. Think about saying "1 of 4 pages" to indicate where the user is.
* the red arrows sometimes move between pages – Cassiopeia, Andromeda, Draco, Libra, Sag, Leo, Perseus, Orion
* Hercules moves from the first to second pages
A few typos on these pages:
Ursa Minor: p4 - line 7 - "horizon",
Cassiopeia: p5 - line 7 - "beautiful"
Andromeda: p4 - line 6 - "consulting an oracle, Cepheus"
Draco: p5 - line 2 - "Thuban", p6 - line 1 - "Greek myth"
Sagittarius: p3 - line 10 - "Milky Way", p7 - line 5 - "although he had not"
Leo: p3 - line 4 "Big Dipper",
Hydra: p3 - line 1 - "Sea Monster, is seen", p4 - line 4 "magnitude of about 2"
Also, a few pages had different spacing between sentences.
Patterns, Game:
Nothing loaded in content area.
Gallery:
Cool idea! Maybe add titles to the image, so the viewer remembers which constellation they are looking at. Draco is hard to see.
Sitemap, Reference:
Page does not exist
Great subject, by the way, I think everyone must enjoy looking at stars. :) I look forward to seeing what else you're planning for this.
See you later today,
Emily
Service Hours
Tutoring, 14 hours:
- Sunny Lim, 1 hr, 11/28
- Stephanie Ahn, 2 hrs, 11/02
- Stephanie Ahn, 1 hr, 11/11
- Jea Choi, 1 hr, 11/28
- Sunny Lim, 2 hrs, 11/29
- Eun Ju Jung, 2 hrs, 11/29
- Eun Ju Jung, 1 hr, 12/03
- Eun Ju Jung, 1 hr, 12/05
- HueiHsien Liu, 2 hrs, 10/21
- Suhwa Lee, 1 hr, 11/28
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